Raw

**Markers**  
▲ top/answer · ● first-level group · ○ supporting detail · ⚠ violation · ↑ buried conclusion · ⇄ wrong order type here · ⊗ overlap · ⊕ gap · ✂ cut/move to appendix

**Annotated opening**  
⚠ This memorandum describes how project teams identify and deliver significant  
profit improvements. [topic label, not answer]  
⚠ It is organized in six sections: [table of contents; more than four top-level items; order not explained]

    ⚠ Background [context label, not a claim]
    ⚠ Principles of the project-team approach [idea label, not a claim]
    ⚠ Definition of project work [scope label, not a claim]
    ⚠ Organization of the program [process label, not a claim]
    ⚠ Distinctive benefits and results [payoff label, not a claim]
    ⚠ Conditions required for success [requirement label, not a claim]

**Findings**

| Location | Violation | Fix |
|---|---|---|
| First sentence | Statement of purpose / topic label; no answer to the reader’s question | Make the first line a one-sentence answer, not a description of the memo |
| Opening | No SCQ: no accepted Situation, Complication, or literal Question is visible | Add a short Situation → Complication → Question lead that makes the answer necessary |
| “It is organized in six sections” | Table-of-contents display; no key line or controlling idea above the headings | Put the answer/key line before any section list |
| Six headings | Headings are topic labels, not claims that summarize their sections | Retain only headings that can be read as claims supporting the top |
| Six headings | Mixed kinds: background, principles, definition, organization, benefits, conditions | Regroup into one kind matched to the reader’s question |
| Six headings | More than four first-level groups | Reduce to ≤4 top-level groups or demote items under parent claims |
| Heading order/setout | Order is not explicable from the visible opening, and the six-way split does not show a MECE field | Choose an order type and define the field so retained headings are non-overlapping and complete |

**Score**

| Axis | Score |
|---|---:|
| Top | 0 |
| Same-kind groups | 0 |
| Order | 1 |
| MECE | 1 |
| Display | 1 |

Total: 3/10 — not structured yet.

**Three highest-value fixes**  
1. Replace the opening topic label with a one-sentence answer to the reader’s question.  
2. Cut the six-section list to no more than four same-kind groups under that answer.  
3. Add a two-line SCQ lead so the reader sees the complication that makes the answer matter.  

Next: I can run write.